I am a Year 4 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Hi Blessy, It's great to see you being creative with your writing. Have you thought about pasting your story straight onto your blog instead of embedding a doc (they get a bit messy to look at). I love to see some more description in there so that it paints a picture in my mind.
Kia ora Blessy. I was going to say the same thing as Ms Raisin. Docs don't come up very well in Blogger which is weird. I would really like to read it in it's proper form rather than this squished way.
Hello, Blessy I love the way you made the words big so we can read it. Did you think about what the book was called. I think you should add pics. What will the next story be called
Kia Ora Blessy, Your story was really fun to read! I was not expecting her to go travelling in a rocket ship. Next time think about pasting your story directly into blogger, it was a bit hard to read squished up. Thank you for writing such an interesting story. Ngā Mihi, Miss Short
Hi Blessy, it seems like you have a great idea to share through your story, looking forward to you finishing the story, about a note pad and a rocket scientist and a girl named Nora. Hard to read, more challenging than anything. Would you consider changing the format?Hey, why don't you blog your idea's/ and experiences about lockdown. I am sure that your classmates would love to hear what you have been up to, to fill in your days through/during lockdown. Stay awesome and be kind.
Hi Blessy,
ReplyDeleteIt's great to see you being creative with your writing. Have you thought about pasting your story straight onto your blog instead of embedding a doc (they get a bit messy to look at). I love to see some more description in there so that it paints a picture in my mind.
Kia ora Blessy.
ReplyDeleteI was going to say the same thing as Ms Raisin. Docs don't come up very well in Blogger which is weird. I would really like to read it in it's proper form rather than this squished way.
Hello, Blessy
ReplyDeleteI love the way you made the words big so we can read it. Did you think about what the book was called. I think you should add pics. What will the next story be called
Kia Ora Blessy,
ReplyDeleteYour story was really fun to read! I was not expecting her to go travelling in a rocket ship. Next time think about pasting your story directly into blogger, it was a bit hard to read squished up. Thank you for writing such an interesting story.
Ngā Mihi,
Miss Short
Hi Blessy, it seems like you have a great idea to share through your story, looking forward to you finishing the story, about a note pad and a rocket scientist and a girl named Nora. Hard to read, more challenging than anything. Would you consider changing the format?Hey, why don't you blog your idea's/ and experiences about lockdown. I am sure that your classmates would love to hear what you have been up to, to fill in your days through/during lockdown. Stay awesome and be kind.
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